Going to Whangarei.
On the holidays me and my family went to Whangarei. We went to go and get clothes shopping. And guess what? I got a tablet. I was so excited to go. “Yay, we arrived at Whangarei”. First we went to kmart to get clothes shopping. I got a pair of slippers, plus they looked warm. They were gray. And I got 4 thin t.shirt. They were cool but they weren't warm. And then I got a fluffy warm jacket it was blue and white. After that we went to harvey norman to get our tablet. It was dark black. For lunch we had my favorite, Burger king. And then we went home again.
My next learning steps are
To know how to use a question mark and an exclamation mark correctly
To finish my writing with a reflection (what I thought about the experience)
To add more interesting language (adjectives, similes)
Hi ZEPHANIAH, I’m Ella. Nice blog. Maybe you could say what shop you went to?
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ReplyDeleteHi Ella I'm new at Tautoro school and new at this tecnoligy and I went to Kmart and harvy normans
ReplyDeleteNext time please leave a link to your blog or tell us what school you go to
Blog you later
Hi Ella i'm new at tautoro school i wen't to Kmart and harvy norman
ReplyDeleteHi my cousin I really liked how you described your slippers and your interesting words. Blog you later.
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ReplyDeleteHi my name is Elham from gilberhorpe School.
ReplyDeleteThis great but when you wrote Harvey Norman can you please put capital because it a place.
You next step is to put capital for the place's and names.
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ReplyDeleteHello Zephaniah this is Keila. I like how you described your slippers and I really liked your photo. Just 2 things you need to know you need to make sure your writing makes sense and you need to be careful with your spelling too. But anyway Great story Zephaniah, Great job keep up the good work and writing.
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HELLO Zephaniah it’s Parehuia from Room 4. I really liked your story about how you went to Whangarei and got your own tablet. Wow! it's not every day someone your age gets one of those, so you are very lucky. I really enjoyed reading it but remember next time, try not to put AND after a full stop. All you need to do is check your work before you know it, you will get better at writing.
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